ev01 by JungShan
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A dark twist on the origins of the tooth fairy. To read part one: Revenant part two: Thodia
Featured Artist:JungShan
Inspiring Soundtrack: James Newton Howard – The Bad Color – The Village Soundtrack
Thodia
The king, in his desperate attempt to save his daughter’s life, condemned her spirit to an eternity of darkness. His mind, poisoned with rage, devised a sinister plan to exact his revenge against the Gods by striking down their mortal children.
The nefarious intentions of the king were carried out by the reluctant revenant, her will bound to the talisman held fast within his relentless grip.
With each tooth she stole from under the slumbering forms of the kingdom’s youth, his power over their mortal souls grew. The king’s thirst for vengeance drained the land of hope, his plague ripping the essence from their innocents.
This is how I became a ghost of the girl I once was, the shell of my humanity slowly crumbling under my growing hatred.
I despise the monster my father has become – the monster he’s made of me.
It is time for his reign of terror to end…
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© 2013 Samantha Redstreake Geary
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WriterlySam 
This is so interesting. She is changing within her monster body.
I never thought that she might have the power to escape by herself.
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Glad it’s piqued your interest, Linda:) She does, indeed, have the power to change her fate!
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Hmm. Sounds like it’s going to be a tense moment. Terrific conflict. 🙂
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Thanks, Joanne! That conflict’s been building for centuries:)
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Oh – very intriguing snippet and premise! Love this, as you say, “dark twist” on the tooth fairy story.
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Thank you Lorraine! I’ve always wondered what the “tooth fairy” wants with all those teeth – she’ not building a penthouse:)
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I like this! Sympathetic magic sounds friendly, but whew, it’s dangerous in evil hands!
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Don’t you know it, Sarah! King Minos has turned to the dark side!
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Interesting concept. I like it. Intriguing snippet!
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Thank you Karen! It’s a fun project:)
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Wow, powerful and makes me feel so sorry for her! Excellent excerpt.
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No worries, Veronica, Thodia can hold her own – she’s quite powerful:)
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Ooh…what is coming next? Nice.
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I’ve been wondering that myself, Anastasia:)
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Nice and dark and intriguing! Great snippet!
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Glad you liked it, Monica! It’s fun to write a “dark” tale now and again:)
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Interesting twist on the tooth fairy tale. Wonder how she plans to dethrone him.
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I imagine she’s got just the perfect place in mind to shove all those teeth, Denise:)
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Interesting twist from telling the tale to inside her thoughts. Good job.
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Thanks Kate! I wanted to include her POV so the reader gets a glimpse of her intentions:)
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Reminds me a little of Terry Pratchett’s Hogfather. Only a good bit darker. I never trusted the Tooth Fairy…
Great idea!
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I’ve not heard of the Hogfather – is that part of his Discworld series? I’ll have to check it out:) This particular tale has many dark twists and turns:)
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Yep, it’s one about Death and his Granddaughter, Susan.
The Auditors hire an assassin to take out the Hogfather (Santa) and he starts with the Tooth Fairies…
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Powerful and haunting snippet, Samantha. 🙂
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Thanks Siobhan! Haunting is just what I’m going for:)
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When she collects enough souls, will hers be set free? Intriguing and I’m looking forward to seeing where this goes. Nice snippet.
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Thanks Sharon! Hint: her fate is tied to the “trinkets and bone” talisman that was fashioned to call her spirit back from the dead *evil grin*
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Excellent hook in this snippet. You sucked me right in.
History Sleuth’s Milk Carton Murders
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Oooh, I love to get readers hooked – that’ all a part of my evil plan:)
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Oh, nice snippet! This sounds good.
Shannon at The Warrior Muse
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Thanks Shannon! So glad you stopped by:)
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A fascinating eight there.
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